Write a short story following your chosen character. Where does their story go after the handout? (write in first person)
I ran out of the house. I’d had enough of Cheryl. She was ruining my life, and I needed to get away. I had no idea an ex wife could be such a pain. I didn’t even get in the car, I just ran. I made it to the liquor store. I loaded up on the vodka. I continued on my journey. As I was walking along the road about to open the bottle, a red car pulled over next to me, and the window was winded down. Romili poked his head out of the car and told me to get in. I hadn’t seen him in months. I jumped in the car and we headed down to the lake. It was pretty much the middle of the day. We sat in the car and got hammered together. We both talked about our problems. It really made my day better.
I woke up in the morning in the boot of a red car.
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Add Yours →Hi Charlie,
Something you need to be aware of is that you are starting almost every sentence with “I…” This creates a feeling of repetition and makes your story feel almost list-like. Change up your sentence starters in order to achieve greater impact with your writing. Go back through your work and highlight every time you have used I to start a sentence. There are other ways you can say the same thing without starting it that way.
Don’t forget to use the show don’t tell techniques we’ve discussed in class. This will help evolve your writing past the list style of writing as well and turn it into an experience for your reader.
Thank you
Mr Johnosn